Let's Put it all Together! - Practice Passage 1 Correction
One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at
school. As I entered (verb tense) the classroom where the club met, I was amazed
that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was
surprisingly (adverb) silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When
he learned that I hadn’t played chess before, (comma – introductory phrase) he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, “Remember, when the piece called
the king has no moves left, it’s called checkmate and the game is then
over.” (Quotations) Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills, although à so (conjunction) Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then
showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. (run-on sentence) I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she
yelled, “Checkmate!” As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on
fire with moves and strategies to try at next week’s meeting.
Let's Put it all Together! - Practice Passage 1 Correction
One day last fall, I decided to investigate the chess club at
school. As I entered (verb tense) the classroom where the club met, I was amazed
that the place was packed with players and boards, yet it was
surprisingly (adverb) silent. The club advisor greeted me when I entered. When
he learned that I hadn’t played chess before, (comma – introductory phrase) he asked one of the club members, Amanda, to explain the rules of the game. Amanda showed me the board and the pieces. She then explained how each player took turns and moved the pieces. Amanda said, “Remember, when the piece called
the king has no moves left, it’s called checkmate and the game is then
over.” (Quotations) Because Amanda was such a good teacher, she made the game sound pretty simple. I was ready to try out my new skills, although à so (conjunction) Amanda suggested we play a game. I agreed and told her not to be too easy on me. She took my advice and beat me in just four moves! Amanda then
showed me how she had accomplished this amazing feat. (run-on sentence) I challenged her to another game, and this time I lasted fourteen moves before she
yelled, “Checkmate!” As I left the chess club that day, my mind was on
fire with moves and strategies to try at next week’s meeting.
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